The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
The pie chart illustrated below provides the information on different ages of people living in Yemen and Italy in the year 2000 and
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projection
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2050.
Overall
, the pie charts compare the proportion of citizens from three different age groups during 2000 and in the future
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2050.
Initially
, the citizens in
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Yemen
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had the highest population of youngsters aged between 0- 14 years, followed by middle-aged people standing
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46%,
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the lowest during 2000.
On the other hand
, during 2050, there seemed to be a marked fluctuation in population. The
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individual's
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from 15 - 58 years jumped from 46% to 57 %,
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will show a dramatic decline by a quarter.
In contrast
, the future predictions for Italians showed a steady growth among the elderly with
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42.3%.
Lastly
, the
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seemed to have a
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slight
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decline by 16%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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