The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
The pie chart illustrated below provides the information on different ages of people living in Yemen and Italy in the year 2000 and
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Overall
, the pie charts compare the proportion of citizens from three different age groups during 2000 and in the future Linking Words
of
2050.
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Initially
, the citizens in Linking Words
yemen
had the highest population of youngsters aged between 0- 14 years, followed by middle-aged people standing Change the capitalization
Yemen
with
46%, Change preposition
at
while
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elderly's are
the lowest during 2000.
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elderly were
On the other hand
, during 2050, there seemed to be a marked fluctuation in population. The Linking Words
Yemeni's
individual's Correct quantifier usage
number of Yemeni's
aging
from 15 - 58 years jumped from 46% to 57 %, Replace the word
aged
while
the Linking Words
teenagers
will show a dramatic decline by a quarter. Correct quantifier usage
number of teenagers
In contrast
, the future predictions for Italians showed a steady growth among the elderly with Linking Words
a
42.3%. Correct article usage
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Lastly
, the Linking Words
grown-up's
seemed to have a Change noun form
grown-ups
slightl
decline by 16%.Correct your spelling
slight
slightly
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