The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the bar chart illustrates the percentages of clean energy sources in four countries which are
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, Sweden , Iceland and Turkey in the three years 1997 , 2000 and 2010 .
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, it is noticeable that Iceland produces the largest proportion of renewable energy
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and Sweden were the lowest . As can seen from the chart Turkey showed a fluctuating trend during the period. In the beginning,
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just under 10
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cent and continuously inclined , and
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at around 4%.
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Sweden witnessed a slight growth throughout the period to reach approximately 10% the same figure did
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, Iceland began roughly at around 45% and increased to exactly 60% in the next thirteen years. In 1997, Turkey was around 37% .
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a peak of just over 40% in 2000 .
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, excerpted a decline
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5%
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of the period.
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