Some people think that children should aim to do their best at whatever they are doing. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Some people argue that offspring should try hard in all of the fields

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they have participated

while

others disapprove of

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opinion.Each side has its own merits,and

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support the former view. On the one hand,it is said that

children

should struggle in all of their participating subjects.

For instance

,in some poor families,kids must learn only

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,math and some essential subjects in school,aiming at reaching perfect

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and first place and

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ranked in the first place in class.The reason is

kids’

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the kids’

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family’s belief of whether by studying and entering a prestigious university,their youngsters could make an important

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for

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their fates.

Although

this

way is pretty harsh,it may help

children

have a well-paid job and reduce

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burden on their parents in the future.

On the contrary

,whether kids attempt whatever they are attending has its own disadvantages.Advocates of

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point think that youngsters should just try hard

in learning

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to learn

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language

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a language

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or main subjects in school

instead

of all of the fields, even sports and leisure activities.The way

children

put pressure on them to do

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best at everything could cause problems in their mental health

such

as depression,

OCD

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and OCD

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.

In addition

,kids may lose their carefree childhood which can be their spiritual support when they face difficulties in the future. In conclusion,I reaffirm my conviction that

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should try hard in every attending subject.

Besides

,

school

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schools

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and

family

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families

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should care

children

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for children

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to prevent mental

problem

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problems

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by putting more leisure activities in kids’

schedule

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and other similar things