The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The present table compares data about the percentage of cell phones which 7 different companies produced in 2 several years(2005 and 2006).
Overall
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, Nokia had a large part of manufacturing
instead
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of BenQMobile;
moreover
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, Nokia like other firms except BenQMobile, LG, and Samsung had increasing trends.
According to
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the chart, Nokia was the best mobile producer, for in 2005, had 32.5 per cent of the market;
thereafter
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, in 2006
this
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amount had a 2.5% raise from
last
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year. The second section was Others by 19.2 per cent. Later declined to 16.2%, but
secondly
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, the company was Motorola which had 17.7 percent in 2005;
then
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,
this
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proportion increased to 21.1% in 2006. The third factory was Samsung which had 12.7% in the first years, yet could not develop;
as a result
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, the percentage had a 1% fall. The picture shows that LG and Sony Ericsson were roughly the same as each other at the beginning;
however
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, Sony Ericsson improved its business and cached up 7.4%
instead
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of LG which had approximately the same figures in both years by 6.5%. The
last
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company was BenQMobile which was
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2005
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4.2% and had better efficiency than in 2006.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead, last".
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Market share
  • Manufacturers
  • Annual comparison
  • Dominate
  • Fluctuate
  • Decline/Dip
  • Increase/Surge/Growth
  • Rank/Ranking
  • Competitive landscape
  • Significant
  • Percentage points
  • Emerging players
  • Market exit
  • Overall trend
  • Comparison
  • Dynamics
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