Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as older houses in the local area. Others disagree and say that local authorities should allow people to build homes in the styles of their own choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In our contemporary era, it is acknowledged by some
people
that new property should be constructed in their local traditional style
while
others, including myself, argue that
people
need to have
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freedom to select their own way of modelling. Throughout the centuries most of the government authorities and nationalists were working collaboratively with citizens to preserve their cultural heritage like local
design
of houses.
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of these actions were predominantly to continue their national uniqueness and protect their ancient history.
For example
, in
Kazan
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there is a special area in the city center, called "Kazan Village", which consists of buildings constructed and designed in 17th to 19th century styles.
Furthermore
, their interior designs followed up
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with
traditional
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motives, including a majority of the local
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mosaic
ornament and patterns.
As a result
, Kazan Village attracted more youth and triggered their interest in historical taste in their daily life.
On the other hand
, with the advent of new technology,
people
have more diversity in
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and
design
of real estate.
Moreover
, modern inventions consider more precautions related to the local landscape nuances like facing unpredicted earthquakes or sales.
For instance
, in Sochi, which is
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by mountains, more and more
people
rely on
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applications,
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them to evaluate the safety of their
building
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buildings
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and
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necessery
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necessary
proportion of chemical elements.
Additionally
, there are several local companies integrated
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these apps, promoting 21st century fashionable
design
which
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different from what is inherited from their ancestors.
To conclude
, in our modern world, several
people
try to continue their traditions and keep building houses in their conservative way.
However
, with the help of
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cutting edge technology,
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became safer and more attractive in terms of long-term
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. In my opinion, new interventions in
design
are more beneficial and governments need to allow them for
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