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The Diagram below show how leather goods are produced.

The Diagram below show how leather goods are produced.
#show #leather #goods
The Diagram below
show
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shows
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 how leather goods are produced. The diagram illustrates
leather
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the leather
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 production process.
Overall
, there are ten stages in the ready material fabrication from animal
skin
 to end product.
First,
the animal
skin
 was dried, and the dried
skin
transported
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was transported
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 to the factory. The
skin
 in the factory is cleaned and special
chemical
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chemicals
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,
such
 as lime and pure water are used in
cleaning
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the cleaning
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 process. After being soaked in lime, the
skin
 was transferred to
flattening
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a flattening
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 machine. The
skin
 was shaped in
flattening
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the flattening
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 machine and the damaged parts were removed. In the next
stage
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stage,
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 the
skin
 is soaked again in
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the Tannin
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Tannin
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the Tannin
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 pool, where water and vegetable
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matter
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matters
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matter
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were
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are
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 used
for eliminating
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to eliminate
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bad
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the bad
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smells
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smell
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smells
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.
After
this
 process, the
skin
 is polished in order to obtain relevant material for making various products
such
 as
,
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apply
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 shoes and bags. In the final
stage
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stage,
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 the prepared material is labelled and packed for transportation to wholesalers or sales centers. Before
transportation
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transportation,
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 the leather products passed from
Quality
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the Quality
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 control system in order to meet quality standards. (Samir Nabiyev)
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words skin with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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