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Nowadays genetically modified food is widespread all over the world. While proponents of GM. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of GM food.

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In today’s modern world, genetically modified
food
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 is  consumed  in all parts of the world. Clearly, with
this
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food
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,  people can make more
money
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 and be healthier than before, but there
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also
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 drawbacks to be taken into account. 
Firstly
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, one benefit of genetically modified is  that farmers  can earn more
money
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 .
In other words
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 ,  their fruits and vegetables can grow faster and bigger ,so they can sell more produce .
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 , farmers having genetically modified fruits and vegetables can sell three times
than
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 farmers using traditional
farm
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farms
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.
As a result
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 , they can improve their business.
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secondly
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, the
another
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other
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 benefit is
healthy
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health
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.
This
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 is
becaouse
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because
 genetically modified has a lot of
nutritious
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nutrition
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 and vitamins.
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, people do not need to pay
dietary
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for dietary
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 supplements .
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 , they can save their
money
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 for visiting a doctor ,they can allocate their
money
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 towards other expenses. 
On the other hand
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, one problem is that it affects the ecosystems. When plants are genetically modified, they will not be consumed by some animals or insects. If
this
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 continues, some of these animals and insects will die because they cannot find
food
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 to survive.
Due to
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this
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, some other animals
also
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 will die.
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, when some fruit plants are modified, certain types of bees will die because they do not cannot find nectar to survive.
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, genetically modified
food
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 can create problems
to
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for
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 the environment.Another possible issue is that
the
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apply
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genetically modified fruits and vegetables are expensive .Having a good shape and many nutritious are
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 reason why they are expensive. 
To sum up
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, genetically modified has advantages ,but it can lead to problems for
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 and higher
for
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apply
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  spending.

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grammar
Work on sentence structure and grammar to enhance overall clarity. For instance, correct minor errors such as 'secondly, the another benefit' to 'secondly, another benefit'.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. This will make your argument stronger and more relatable.
coherence cohesion
Consider using more linking words and phrases to improve the logical flow between ideas, such as 'In addition' or 'Furthermore'.
task achievement
The essay covers both advantages and disadvantages of genetically modified food, fulfilling the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and succinct, giving the essay a clear structure.
task achievement
The essay presents clear and comprehensive ideas about the benefits and drawbacks of genetically modified food.

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