Nowadays genetically modified food is widespread all over the world. While proponents of GM. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of GM food.
In today’s modern world, genetically modified
food
is consumed in all parts of the world. Clearly, with this
food
, people can make more money
and be healthier than before, but there also
drawbacks to be taken into account.
Add a missing verb
are also
Firstly
, one benefit of genetically modified is that farmers can earn more money
.In other words
, their fruits and vegetables can grow faster and bigger ,so they can sell more produce .Moreover
, farmers having genetically modified fruits and vegetables can sell three times than
farmers using traditional Correct quantifier usage
more than
farm
.Fix the agreement mistake
farms
As a result
, they can improve their business.secondly
, the Capitalize word
Secondly
another
benefit is Correct quantifier usage
other
healthy
. Replace the word
health
This
is becaouse
genetically modified has a lot of Correct your spelling
because
nutritious
and vitamins. Replace the word
nutrition
Therefore
, people do not need to pay dietary
supplements .Change preposition
for dietary
Thus
, they can save their money
for visiting a doctor ,they can allocate their money
towards other expenses.
On the other hand
, one problem is that it affects the ecosystems. When plants are genetically modified, they will not be consumed by some animals or insects. If this
continues, some of these animals and insects will die because they cannot find food
to survive. Due to
this
, some other animals also
will die. For example
, when some fruit plants are modified, certain types of bees will die because they do not cannot find nectar to survive. Hence
, genetically modified food
can create problems to
the environment.Another possible issue is that Change preposition
for
the
genetically modified fruits and vegetables are expensive .Having a good shape and many nutritious are Correct article usage
apply
this
reason why they are expensive.
To sum up
, genetically modified has advantages ,but it can lead to problems for ecosystem
and higher Correct article usage
the ecosystem
for
spending.Change preposition
apply
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