Developing countries require international organizations' help. Some people prefer financial aid while others think practical aid and advice are better. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is no doubt that developing
countries
need multinational institution's
assist
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,
In addition
, they require both financial and practical
aid
, but
this
question
illustrate
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opinions
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the opinions
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of people on which type of
aid
is better, In my opinion, I consider financial
aid
is more positively effective. In terms of financial
aid
, if developed
countries
or international organizations provide financial support to developing
countries
, they could recover the
economy
and increase the production of goods and services,
also
they could pay their
depts
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, The main reason given to support
this
claim is that money gives the
country
an
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access to attract more companies to set up headquarters,
this
will result in a boom in the
economy
and a variety of diverse opportunities which convince efficient employees from all over the world to move to
this
country
, for illustration, Singapore, 50 years ago, it was a poor,corrupted
country
,
However
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, when they received financial
aid
from multinational institutions they solved 80% of their problems, which recovered the
economy
.
Whereas
practical
aid
or advice does not improve the
country
if they don't have
capital
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or financial
aid
,
this
does not mean practical
aid
is useless, but it's essential to afford capital in order to make sure that practical
aid
succeeds, for illustration, an organization gives some practical projects and
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
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to a developing
country
to recover, but the developing
country
does not have
capital
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the capital
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to pay for
this
project.
Firstly
, developing
countries
need financial
aid
in order to plan for
a practical projects
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practical projects
a practical project
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. In conclusion, practical
aid
requires capital (money) to succeed,
Nonetheless
, financial
aid
will solve the majority of the problems, which will improve and
boom
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boost
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the
economy
,
this
is why
a
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I
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believe financial support is more helpful.
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Ensure that you clearly explain the link between financial aid and practical aid, and how they can complement each other.
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Clarify your opinion by providing more detailed examples and evidence to support your viewpoints.
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The main points are generally well-supported with relevant examples, especially the one about Singapore.

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