Developing countries require international organizations' help. Some people prefer financial aid while others think practical aid and advice are better. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that developing

countries

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need multinational institution's

assist

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, they require both financial and practical

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opinions

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the opinions

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of people on which type of

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is better, In my opinion, I consider financial

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is more positively effective. In terms of financial

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, if developed

countries

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or international organizations provide financial support to developing

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, they could recover the

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and increase the production of goods and services,

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they could pay their

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, The main reason given to support

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claim is that money gives the

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access to attract more companies to set up headquarters,

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will result in a boom in the

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and a variety of diverse opportunities which convince efficient employees from all over the world to move to

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country

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, for illustration, Singapore, 50 years ago, it was a poor,corrupted

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, when they received financial

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from multinational institutions they solved 80% of their problems, which recovered the

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practical

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or advice does not improve the

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if they don't have

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or financial

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does not mean practical

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is useless, but it's essential to afford capital in order to make sure that practical

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succeeds, for illustration, an organization gives some practical projects and

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to a developing

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to recover, but the developing

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does not have

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to pay for

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, developing

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need financial

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in order to plan for

a practical projects

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practical projects

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. In conclusion, practical

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requires capital (money) to succeed,

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, financial

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will solve the majority of the problems, which will improve and

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believe financial support is more helpful.

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coherence cohesion

Try to avoid run-on sentences and use punctuation effectively. Breaking down long sentences will help in making your ideas clearer and more comprehensible.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that you clearly explain the link between financial aid and practical aid, and how they can complement each other.

task achievement

Make sure all ideas are fully explored and explained. Some statements need further elaboration to strengthen your argument.

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Clarify your opinion by providing more detailed examples and evidence to support your viewpoints.

coherence cohesion

Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames your argument well.

task achievement

The main points are generally well-supported with relevant examples, especially the one about Singapore.

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

284 words

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