Some people feel that the private lives of celebrities should not be openly shared by the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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raise privacy issues.

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can be harmful to their reputation and can cause a decline in the production industry

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, by exposing news through different channels it can cause mental health problems to different

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sometimes they can be

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kind of news. In conclusion, sharing

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should not be the sole idea of

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structure

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relevance

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Paragraph 1 - Introduction
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

178 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Invasion of privacy
Media scrutiny
Public persona
Personal autonomy
Sensationalism
Paparazzi
Tabloid journalism
Right to privacy
Mental well-being
Public interest
Ethical journalism
Celebrity culture
Gossip columns

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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