Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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waste in the environment which
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causing
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affect
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eround
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on
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I will elaborate
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reasons behind
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case providing some solutions to reduce
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The first
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and foremost, the
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reason
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it is the production significant increase
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around
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our world
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and
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consequently
,
rubbish
rise .
Furthermore
,
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the populatin
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populatin
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population
become a lot.
Therefore
,their consumption increases.
Moreover
, some countries lack pins
due to
poverty.
hence
throw
rubbish
any place.
In addition
, one lacks cleanliness in their life,they reside in
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location.
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resolve
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.government
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government
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keep pins
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places
to be
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clean.
Moreover
, giving individuals instructions and devices about the importance of cleanliness and How to tidy and clean our places.
Furthermore
, put in every
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situation
institution
more
waste land
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wasteland
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to avoid diseases and illnesses .As you know
rubbish
affect
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to our
healthy
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.
Also
,stop to usage
plastic
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of plastic
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bags
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in the
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.
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.evey
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every
states
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should
be take
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a strict decision about
this
trouble
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problem
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to reduce
of
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apply
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rubbish
risks.
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Addresses the prompt by discussing reasons for increased rubbish production and suggesting governmental solutions.
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Uses some specific vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'consumption', 'poverty', and 'cleanliness'.

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