68.The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four countries received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

68.The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four countries received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
This
chart gives information about
economic
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the economic
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aid that four countries received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014.
Overall
, there are 4 nations who are China, Indonesia, Thailand and South Africa. Chinese and South Africa’s financial aid in 1974 was the highest one for above 60 million among the other
countryside
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countries
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. But, in 2014
this
effect was
decrease
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decreased
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.
Additionally
, similarities between
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the republic
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republic
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Republic
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of Indonesia with the
kingdom
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Kingdom
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of Thailand are economy and
medicine
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medical
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source
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sources
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.
For instance
,
healthcare
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the healthcare
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category was the highest one in 1974. So, that’s why in many
area’s
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areas
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this
profession very successful.
For example
, Chinese income for all categories
were
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was
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increased,
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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at the end
of
2014
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2014,
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this
sort of budget was decreased. In conclusion,
that
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apply
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only these 4 states were considered, highlighting their major and minor aspects, but
this
is not well articulated. Rating
this
is
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apply
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always
depend
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depends
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on
of
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apply
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their
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the
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economic issues and challenges for all top-rating
homeland
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homelands
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.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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