68.The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four countries received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
This
chart gives information about economic
aid that four countries received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014.
Correct article usage
the economic
Overall
, there are 4 nations who are China, Indonesia, Thailand and South Africa. Chinese and South Africa’s financial aid in 1974 was the highest one for above 60 million among the other countryside
. But, in 2014 Replace the word
countries
this
effect was decrease
. Wrong verb form
decreased
Additionally
, similarities between Correct article usage
the republic
republic
of Indonesia with the Capitalize word
Republic
kingdom
of Thailand are economy and Capitalize word
Kingdom
medicine
Replace the word
medical
source
.
Fix the agreement mistake
sources
For instance
, healthcare
category was the highest one in 1974. So, that’s why in many Correct article usage
the healthcare
area’s
Correct your spelling
areas
this
profession very successful. For example
, Chinese income for all categories were
increased, Change the verb form
was
unfortunately
Add a comma
unfortunately,
at the end
of 2014
Add a comma
2014,
this
sort of budget was decreased.
In conclusion, that
only these 4 states were considered, highlighting their major and minor aspects, but Correct word choice
apply
this
is not well articulated. Rating this
is
always Unnecessary verb
apply
depend
on Correct subject-verb agreement
depends
of
Change preposition
apply
their
economic issues and challenges for all top-rating Change the word
the
homeland
.Fix the agreement mistake
homelands
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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