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the best way to make roads safer is to make vehicle drivers pass exam each year. to what cextent do ypu agree or disagree?

#roads #vehicle #drivers #exam #year #cextent #ypu
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In all monopolies,
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the harbor
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harbor
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 will be more secure if vehicle users pass the driving tests each
year
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.
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 it will be supportable, it is more effective if there are special areas for vehicle drivers.
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 with, there should be a driving test for
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 each
year
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. They will be better acknowledged of the
rules
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 on the highway.
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, there will be a reduced percentage of accidents on roads.
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, when not only
cyclists
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 but
also
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 other drivers have learnt the
rules
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, there are fewer crashes on the road.
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, if
cyclists
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 pass the exam each
year
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, they will be more qualified
chauffeur
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 who are supportable in keeping the lane safe.
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 passing the exam each
year
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 would be supportable, the best way is to have special zones for
cyclists
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. In
this
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 case,
cyclists
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 would feel their self more comfortable in a private area where would are cyclistscyclist.
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, there will be neither crashes with other
jockey
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 nor an obligation to pass exams regularly.
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, when
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 are selected depending on the type of transport, individuals will not have any crashes with mixed transport at all.
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,
cyclists
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 do not feel scared about big roads with cars.
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, if there are selected zones,
road
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the road
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 will be safer without passing exams constantly since cyclist have to know only their
rules
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. By taking both sides into account I consider that
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 passing the exam provides us with
qualified
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 trainer who
know
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 the
rules
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 of the expressway, the best way is to select
wharf
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the wharf
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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