The unlimited use of c ars many cause problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars? Give areason for your answer and include any revelant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

The excessive use of
vehicles
may lead to negative impacts.
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includes
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air
pollution and too much
traffic
. Humankind should be advised on alternative
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of transport. First of all, the more
the
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cars are used, the more the environment is polluted. They produce too much noise when they are hooting
as well as
produce
bad
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smell to the
air
which is harmful to the community.
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, a study done by
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students
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Cambridge University on the causes of pollution
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showed that
vehicles
contributed to almost 50
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of all
the the
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air
pollutants.
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shows that excessive usage of
vehicles
mainly by private users has greatly influenced them to have undesirable effects
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the environment.
Nonetheless
, especially in urban areas high usage of
vehicles
has led to increased cases of
traffic
especially in the morning,
lunch
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hour and
at
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the evening.
This
is because most of
working
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stations open and close mainly
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same time
therefore
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number of workers will be either
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going to work, to have lunch or
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going home and
this
will cause
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on the roads.
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, for the past five
years
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London has experienced high
traffic
due to
increased
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number of
vehicles
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caused by their affordability. Around 95
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of residents in London own a car and
this
makes the roads to be full throughout the day. In conclusion, I believe that
due to
the fact that
vehicles
cause high
traffic
and pollute the
air
, people should be discouraged from using them and use alternate methods like a train to move from one place to the other and encourage
use
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of public
vehicles
as well in order to carb the negative effects.
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