The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The two maps delineate different changes on a beach in 1950 and in the present day.
Overall
, there has been lots more improvement from 1950 to now, with more
buildings
and more facilities. In 1950, there were only a few features on the beach. There were only seven main
buildings
: a playground, dining tables,
pavilion
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a pavilion
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,
car
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a car
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park
, two pools, and a lighthouse.
Additionally
, the road from the city to the beach ended at the parking lot. Both pools were 25 meters in length.
In contrast
, in the present day, there are lots of differences. Noticeably, there are more
buildings
, and some old
buildings
have been changed. The new
buildings
are a restaurant, surf clubs, and another
car
park
. The restaurant is located on the left, near the pool,
along with
a surf club.
Additionally
, the pool on the left is extended to 50 meters.
Moreover
, the road that used to only lead to a
car
park
is now ending at the lighthouse, with the other surf club nearby.
Finally
, the playground is replaced by another
car
park
along the road.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words buildings, car, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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