The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy, and Austria between 1995 and 2005

The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy, and Austria between 1995 and 2005
The given line graph illustrates how much money people spent on
books
in four different countries, namely
Germany
, Italy, France, and
Austria
from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
, it is evident that all four countries experienced an upward trend in
books
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book
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purchasing
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over 20 years.
Germany
was the leader with the highest amount of cash spent on
books
even though there was a tiny increase only.
Austria
was noticed as the country witnessed the most significant growth over the period. As you can see, at the beginning of
period
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, the expenditure on
books
in
Germany
was
on
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the top, with 80 million US dollars
while
France and Italy followed after with 50 and 55, respectively.
Austria
spent
least
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money on
books
with
the
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only 30 million US dollars.
However
,
Germany
experienced a
fluctuated
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decrease from 90 to 85 in 1999 and 2003, respectively.
Besides
that, Italy and France did not show any significant change over time
by
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only
increase
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10
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million.
Austria
started at the lowest point with 30 in 1995 but
raised
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significantly to 70 in 2005 and became the third country on the graph by surpassing Italy.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, germany, austria with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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