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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given maps illustrate a harbour in the past and the transformation of it today.
Overall
,
while
 both roads in the plans are being expanded, some facilities located in
south-west
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the south-west
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 and south-east have been built and swapped locations. In 2000, whilst the main road only led to one car park, nowadays it has been expanded and led to both of the aforementioned places. The street in the south of the map has removed the way to the car park,
however
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however,
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 a lane
went
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that went
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 through the hotel, which was built to replace the castle in 2000, has been added. The public beach in the past today has been converted into a private beach for
the
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apply
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hotel visitors only. In the north of the Porth Harbour, the dock has been added to another one. Looking to the
south-west
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southwest
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in
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on
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 the map, a
showers
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shower
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 and toilets room has been constructed above the second car park,
while
 the fishing boats and the marina have been swapped together.
Moreover
, in the south, there are cafes and shops on the left of the lifeboat.
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grammar
Ensure accurate use of prepositions and grammatical structures to enhance clarity.
structure
Include a more detailed description of the harbor's transformation in the introduction and conclusion for a more unified response.
vocabulary
Try to use varied vocabulary and sentence structures to make the essay more engaging.
comparison
Good attempt at comparing features of the harbor from 2000 and today.
description
Identified and described key changes in the harbor's layout and facilities effectively.

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