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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustration above shows the planned project given two possible areas to construct a new shopping mall in a city that
are
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 mentioned as S1 and S2 respectively.
Furthermore
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, the city centre is depicted in the central position of the map
while
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industrial
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the industrial
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 estate is to the east,
housing
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the housing
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 state to the north-west and the golf course/park area is to the western part.
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, Considering the location
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 the upper suggested region it lies between a flowing waterway,and a railway track
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 a road passes through the estate bordering in the north. Expanding on the other proposed possible locality, which is located
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 south between the rail tracks and roads running vertically on both
its
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sides, the exact coordinates for
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 site are to the southeast compared to the previously mentioned site. In Conclusion, the two localities projected are on different sides of the map surrounded by similar convenience structures for transportation
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on the other hand
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, they border with distinct, already established estates.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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