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The pie charts illustrate the portion of students at one university in the UK who can speak other languages besides English, in the years 2000 and 2010.

The pie charts illustrate the portion of students at one university in the UK who can speak other languages besides English, in the years 2000 and 2010.
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The pie chart describes the portion of
students
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 at a university in the UK who can communicate in other
languages
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 either than
English
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, in the years 2000 and 2010. In 2000, most of the
students
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 could speak Spanish at 30%;
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 20% of the
students
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 couldn't speak any other
languages
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 other than
English
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.
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,
students
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 who only spoke in French and those who could speak other
languages
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 make up 30% of the
students
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 combined. The remaining 20% consisted of
students
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 who only spoke German and
students
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 who spoke two other
languages
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.
On the other hand
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, in 2010. the population of
students
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 who only spoke Spanish had increased to 35%;
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, the number of
students
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 who communicate in another language increased to 20%.
Students
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 who converse in two other
languages
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also
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 added to their population by 15%.
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, the number of French speakers and
English
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 speakers had a decrease to 10%.
To conclude
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, the population of
students
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 who spoke in other
languages
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 other than
English
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 changed from 2000 to 2010, with most of the
students
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 able to speak Spanish.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, languages, english with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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