The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.
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the percentage of British people giving money to charity by
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range for the
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1990 and 2010.
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1990, British people who are under 50 spent more money on charity activities than the group over 50
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of 36 and 50 contributed the largest percentage in 1990
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those aged 51-65 had the highest rate in the
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2010.
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of 18 and 25 contributed around 17 per cent which was the lowest per cent in the
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1990. The UK's residents in the group aged between 26-35 and 36-50 made up 31% and 43%, respectively.
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, after 20
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the 18 to 25
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group had a significant fall by over 10% , from 17% to 6%. At the same time, the two next groups ages 26-35 and 36-50 had the same phenomenon, dropping slightly to 23% and 33%, respectively. The percentage of British people giving money to charity by 51-65
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old was 25% and the citizens who were over 65 was 31% in the
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1990. In the next 20
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, the
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of 51-65 reached a peak in the
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2010 ( about 40% ) and there was a slight rise in the rate of the oldest from 31% to 36%.
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