The graph below shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012.
Given is a graph illustrating the differences
of
proportion between male and female academic staff members in faculties of a main university in 2012.
Some facilities have large divergences. Engineering’s male Change preposition
in
staffs
occupy 85%, which is the largest percentage of Fix the agreement mistake
staff
male
in Fix the agreement mistake
males
university
, Correct article usage
the university
whereas
female staffs
only account for 15%. Fix the agreement mistake
staff
Similarly
, the largest percentage of female
in university is Fix the agreement mistake
females
education
, female Change preposition
in education
staffs
represent 75% and only 25% Fix the agreement mistake
staff
for
male Change preposition
apply
staffs
.
Male-to-female ratios in Fix the agreement mistake
staff
other
5 faculties are relatively balanced. In medicine, the proportion of Correct article usage
the other
woman
and Fix the agreement mistake
women
man
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men staff
staffs
is coordinate
. Wrong verb form
coordinated
Man
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Men staff
staffs
constitute percentages more than woman’s
in business, law and science, and account for 65%, 60% and 62% respectively. Change noun form
woman
By contrast
, female
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the female
staffs’
component is larger than male’s only in arts, Change noun form
staff’s
female’s
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females
female
makes
up 55% and Correct subject-verb agreement
make
male’s
Change noun form
males
accounts
for 45%.
In conclusion, male Correct subject-verb agreement
account
staffs’
proportions are larger than Fix the agreement mistake
staff’
female’s
in business, engineering, law and science, Change noun form
female
while
woman’s
dominates half part of medicine and Change the noun form
women
woman
ahead
in arts and education.Add a missing verb
are ahead
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