The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The present bar chart and table compare data about the
number
of pupils who stayed in 4 different English-speaking countries namely, the USA, the UK,
Canada
, and
Australia
in 2004 and 2012.
Overall
, the
number
of foreign
students
was rising;
thereafter
,
America
was the
first
country in which
students
emigrated for study, and the
last
one was
Canada
.
Nevertheless
,
Australia
had a large percentage of foreign
students
instead
of
America
.
According to
the Bar diagrams, the
first
destination of migration
students
was
America
with 170,000 in 2004,
then
this
number
increased to roughly 250 in 2012. The second level was the United Kingdom and
Australia
which had absolutely the same amount in 2004 120,000;
then
, these figures had approximately 80,000 clim. The
last
one was
Canada
which had 40,000
students
in 2004.
Also
, like other countries trend in 2012 was 60,000. The table shows the proportion of total
students
number
in all countries except
America
had an improvement, and
Australia
was the
first
one by 19% in 2004;
then
a 5% increase in 2012.
secondly
, the UK had 9% in the
first
year
,
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and had a 4% rise.
Thirdly
,
Canada
with 5% in 2004, had the same percentage increase as the proportion of the USA in both years by 2 per cent.
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