The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The present bar chart and table compare data about the
number
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of pupils who stayed in 4 different English-speaking countries namely, the USA, the UK,
Canada
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, and
Australia
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in 2004 and 2012.
Overall
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, the
number
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of foreign
students
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was rising;
thereafter
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,
America
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was the
first
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country in which
students
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emigrated for study, and the
last
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one was
Canada
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.
Nevertheless
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,
Australia
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had a large percentage of foreign
students
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instead
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of
America
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.
According to
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the Bar diagrams, the
first
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destination of migration
students
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was
America
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with 170,000 in 2004,
then
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this
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number
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increased to roughly 250 in 2012. The second level was the United Kingdom and
Australia
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which had absolutely the same amount in 2004 120,000;
then
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, these figures had approximately 80,000 clim. The
last
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one was
Canada
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which had 40,000
students
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in 2004.
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, like other countries trend in 2012 was 60,000. The table shows the proportion of total
students
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number
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in all countries except
America
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had an improvement, and
Australia
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was the
first
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one by 19% in 2004;
then
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a 5% increase in 2012.
secondly
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, the UK had 9% in the
first
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year
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and had a 4% rise.
Thirdly
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,
Canada
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with 5% in 2004, had the same percentage increase as the proportion of the USA in both years by 2 per cent.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, canada, australia, students, america, first with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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