In some contries more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. what are the reasons for this? is this positive or negative development?

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In today's fast
paccing
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pacing
world,
fitness
is quite
challanging
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challenging
to maintain for individuals. To balance
healthy-toned
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a healthy-toned
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body some
prefers
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prefer
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to have a personal
fitness
coach rather than not
idulging
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indulging
in outdoor sports activities.
However
, there are some bright outcomes and drawbacks to
seek
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seeking
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personal help from
fitness
tutors.
This
essay will elaborate
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causes for new trends in
fitness
. Indeed, health professional has remarkable knowledge and expertise
on
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in
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focused
plan
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plans
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for gym training.
For example
, it would be more imperative for
obese
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an obese
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or diabetic challanged person to have
gym
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a gym
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trainer
rather than
wroking
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working
out on
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an uneffective
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uneffective
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ineffective
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exercsie
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exercise
plan. Another strongest reason to have
personal
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a personal
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fitness
coach for
being
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be
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motivated and dedicated towards daily exercise goals.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, there is
increasing
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in
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demand for gym-training
setting
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settings
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, in global cities with
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the implimentaion
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implimentaion
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implementation
of certain technologies.
Such
as
,
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apply
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fitness
application
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applications
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on online
plateforms
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platforms
where
,
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apply
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individual
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individuals
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can have access
of
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to
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muscle-building tutors who
teaches
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teach
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basic warm-up to weight-loss therapies at home. Apart from that, these applications come with cheap prices and
affordable
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are affordable
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for a group or couples.
Undoubtably
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, youth learn and influenced to become
a
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apply
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fitness
freak from celebrities and athletes as they have their own
execise
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exercise
trainer
who
help
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helps
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them to maintain
tonned
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bodycand
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body and
so on common people
also
supports
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them as of new trend.
Consequently
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it is
unneccessory
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unnecessary
that
healthy
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a healthy
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body can be maintained by
trainer
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a trainer
the trainer
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but, focussing
inidviduals
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individuals
on
plethora
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a plethora
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of physical activities
such
as running, jogging,
swimming
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and swimming
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.
Thesse
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These
activities can be done
by
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without any help.
Though sports
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Sports
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play
vital
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role in
educational
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the educational
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curriculum which, can be achieved
by
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apply
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indipendently
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independently
.
To conclude
, I
stongly
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strongly
believe hiring
personal
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a personal
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trainer
can be time-saving and
conveniently
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convenient
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as it has made positive
chnages
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changes
to the way people
performs
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perform
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vigorous exercises without
perticular
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particular
knowledge.
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