Some people believe that in the future, environmental problems will mean that we are unable to live on this planet. In order to survive, the human species will need to find another planet that can support life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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There is no doubt that the
earth
facing a soaring level of environmental problems.
While
, some people argue that humankind will live on different a
planet
,
due to
environmental hazards. I believe that
this
will not be the case in the future ,because of several logical reasons.
Although
, I partially agree with some points. The most reasonable point , in my opinion, is that climate change is the reason behind
extinction
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the extinction
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of some animal species.
Therefore
, so many individuals believe that climate change could lead to human extinction if steps are not taken to reduce various pollution sources.
For example
,
Japanese
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Tsunami in 2004, caused death for a huge number of people in Japan. I oppose the idea that we are unable to live on
Earth
in the future, in order to survive we need to find another
planet
that can support life.
First,
human
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the human
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population is over billions on
this
planet
, so,
major
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a major
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disaster can not cause death to all people on
earth
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Earth
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.
Second,
human nature
knowing
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to be able to adapt easily to new environments.
Finally
, living on different planets is not suitable for humankind. To illustrate, Mars
planet
was the alternative to
Earth
, until research approved that seeds are not growing on its soil.
In other words
, the alternative place to live should
has
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the living requirements,
such
as good temperature and water availability. In conclusion,
Although
human
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the human
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species
facing
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faces
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the danger of extinct and not being able to live on
Earth
. I believe that our
planet
is the most suitable place to live
on
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apply
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grammar
Ensure there are no grammatical errors such as subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'the earth facing' should be 'the earth is facing').
example
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structure
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clarity
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clarity
Your introduction does a good job of addressing the essay topic and presenting your stance clearly.
clarity
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example
The use of examples, such as the mention of the Japanese tsunami, helps provide context and support for your points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental degradation
  • sustainable development
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • biodiversity loss
  • climate change
  • greenhouse gases
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitable planets
  • space colonization
  • terraforming
  • ethical dilemmas
  • resource allocation
  • technological advancements
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