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You are planning to take a vacation. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter •describe the vacation spot you have chosen •explain how you plan to spend your time there •invite your friend to join you on your vacation Begin your letter as follows: Dear Raj

#vacation #friend #•describe #spot #•explain #plan #time #•invite #raj
I think you are doing well and your family. I am writing
this
 letter to tell you to join my
vocation
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vacation
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 next week to
senggigi
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Senggigi
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 it will be awesome. Believe me, It will be
incridible
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incredible
, Senggigi is the best place to vacation. You know that
,
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 there are one of the
beautiful
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most beautiful
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place
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 in the world.
Also
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 senggigi has beautiful beaches and the environment
iss
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is
 still natural which is full of
the
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apply
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tourist
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tourists
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. It will be very cool,
becaouse
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because
i
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I
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option
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the option
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 of sport. It will be amazing cause
i
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I
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 know that you like sport. So we can play summer
sport
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sports
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 like beach
vollyballand
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volleyball and
 football
to
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too
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.
Beside
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that
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i
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I
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 want to meet some
tourist
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tourists
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 to
imvpove
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improve
 my speaking
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of english
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english
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English
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.
In
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 the other
hand
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 we spend time
theree
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there
three
 days and two
night
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nights
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 over there. I hope you will join me on my trip. the
tickety
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tickets
rickety
ticket
 for you is free the
raoson
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reservation
is
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 already bought a ticket for you, and let me know
you
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your
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respon
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response
 as soon as possible , I am waiting for our
vocation
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vacation
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.
Your
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Yours
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 Sincerely SAPARWADI.
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on

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task achievement
Your letter covers all the essential points requested in the prompt. Ensure you provide more details in each section to give a clearer picture of the vacation plans.
coherence cohesion
Make sure your paragraphs focus on one main idea to improve clarity and coherence. This will help readers follow your thoughts more easily.
general
There are some grammatical errors and typos (e.g., 'vocatuon,' 'incridible,' 'iss'). Pay attention to these and proofread your writing to avoid such mistakes.
greeting and closing
The opening and closing of your letter are appropriate, creating a friendly tone that suits a letter to a friend.
coherence cohesion
You manage to include enthusiasm and personal touches, which makes the letter engaging for the reader.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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