The pie charts present the spending habits of people in UK in 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The pie charts present the spending habits of people in UK in 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
The pie charts illustrate the UK population's
money wasting
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pattern in two years.
Overall
,
it is clear that
food and car pieces which had the majority
of
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percentage stayed in first and second places.
However
, all types of
expending
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expanding
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proportions in each section changed.
Firstly
, there were three sections which increased during 30 years. Restaurant
spendings
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spending
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which was 7
percent
in 1971, doubled in 2001. Meanwhile, computers outline customs upsurge from 2%
till
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12%. In 1971 cars which were in second place with 22
percent
, became first with 43
percent
.
Secondly
, four sections were decreased . Furniture and petrol
spendings
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didn’t lose a big percentage .
While
furniture lost 1
percent
from 9 till 8. At the same
time
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petrol lost 2
percent
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per cent
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. Meanwhile, people have reduced book purchases by 1
percent
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per cent
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, which was 6% in 1971. Food disbursing habits suffered
great
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loss from 44% to 14% ,
however
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stayed in
top
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the top
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three.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.

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