Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Part of society is concerned about sharing data as much as they can, regarding the scientific investigation ,economy and education system. Some others are awareness to be shared independently the most necessary and important data.In
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I discuss both views and my take on them. As a whole, scientific investors very essential to the development of both the economy and the education field. As an
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the coronary catheter which is an unremarkable invention of science, is used to open the coronary artery blocks.
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greatest finding gradually decreased the death percentage by heart attack.
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, cardiology studies and
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research fields developed and most international cardiac educational sessions were organised.
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, the various qualities, sizes and different brands of coronary catheter products and manufacturers
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dramatically spread of cardiac business world.
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, the most dangerous economic academic research is diseases. Recently covid-19 epidemic has been one of extraordinarily negative aspects of the above-mentioned three factors. Most of the selfish behaviour of the science, knowledge sharing with marketing.
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, the nucleus invention had been threatened
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the ordinary earth. Meanwhile, some people believe that there should be restrictions or limits to sharing information on those credentials.
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, we need to maintain internal rules, regulations and attitudes upon these perceptions.

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Ensure that both views are discussed in a balanced manner. One view seems to be covered more extensively by using detailed examples.
coherence cohesion
Clarify your main points and ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea. Some transitions between ideas need to be smoother.
coherence cohesion
The essay has an introduction and a conclusion, which provides a clear structure.
task achievement
The essay uses relevant examples to support the arguments presented, such as the coronary catheter in scientific research and the COVID-19 pandemic.

Word Count

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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