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Band 4.5

You are working for a company. You need to make some time off work and want to ask your manager about... Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, explain why you want to take time off work. Give details of the amount of work you need. Suggest how your work could be covered when you are away

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Dear Robbie, hope
this
 letter finds you well, a good health,
as well as
 aware that our kid's summer vacation is starting from July 15 to 30. As it's holiday time, we have planned to visit our grandmother in
Arkanas
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Arkansas
 from July 20 to 30. So I kindly request you to provide me
a
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with a
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leave of 10 days as we are going
for
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on
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 our family visit. Well, on
behalf
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my behalf
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of
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apply
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me
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apply
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, my senior team member Ram will be taking care of my job as he is very fond of doing my job. Hopefully, he will consider my application. We are sincerely serious.
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coherence cohesion
It's important to maintain clear paragraphing. Consider dividing the letter into distinct sections: introduction, reason for leave, duration of leave, and how work will be managed in your absence.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that you structure the sentences more effectively. For example, 'On behalf of me, my senior team member Ram will be taking care of my job as he is very fond of doing my job' could be simplified for clarity.
task achievement
You've effectively communicated the reason for your leave and provided an alternative arrangement for your responsibilities.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is suitable for a professional request, maintaining respect and politeness throughout.
task achievement
You've included all necessary information: the reason for the leave, duration, and a plan for handling your tasks while you are away.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Respectful greeting (e.g., 'Dear [Manager's name],')
  • Time off, absence, leave of absence
  • Personal circumstances, compelling reason
  • Duration, number of days/weeks
  • Cover duties, delegate tasks, work handover
  • Alternative arrangements, contingency plans
  • Preparation, advance work, assistance
  • Gratitude, appreciate, understanding
  • Inconvenience, minimal disruption
  • Request approval, formally request
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