The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs indicate the percentage of households with washing machines,
refrigerators
, and
vacuum
cleaners
and the
number
of
hours
of
housework
per household between 1920 and 2019. The
overall
trends show the percentage of electrical appliances was increasing over time,
while
the
number
of time spent on
housework
was declining. In 1920, not even half of the population owned electrical appliances,
such
as washing machines,
refrigerators
and
vacuum
cleaners
. Only 40% of the households had a washing machine in 1920, whilst the percentage of households who owned
refrigerators
and
vacuum
cleaners
was smaller with only 30% and 1% respectively.
This
number
kept increasing every year until the
number
of families who had
vacuum
cleaners
and
refrigerators
in their
home
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homes
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reached 100%.
Additionally
, the
amount
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number
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of families who chose to buy washing machines
was
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were
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increasing, albeit a smaller rise, with only a 35% increase.
Consequently
, the
number
of
hours
of
housework
per household was dropping significantly. In 1920, people spent 50
hours
per
week
doing their
housework
, like washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning.
However
, that
number
dropped to only 10
hours
per
week
in 2019. All-in-all, there was a negative correlation between the ratio of family with electrical appliances and the amount of
housework
per
week
between 1920-2019. The ratio of electrical appliance ownership kept rising,
while
the
hours
spent doing
housework
per
week
kept declining.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words refrigerators, vacuum, cleaners, number, hours, housework, week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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