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The charts below present ifornation about electricity generated using renewable and non-renewable energy in the united states in 2009 and 2019. summarise the imformation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The charts below present ifornation about electricity generated using renewable and non-renewable energy in the united states in 2009 and 2019. summarise the imformation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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charts
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 shows
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 the data reports of production and usage of electric power by renewable and non-renewable energy in the USA in
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year
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 2009 and 2019.
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, coal
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 the largest source of generating current in 2009,
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 petroleum was the least contributor
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hydroelectric
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 sector was leading in terms of renewable sources in 2009, and solar had a negligible contribution in 2009. In,
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 of non-renewable resources, coal was leading with 1756 billion kilowatt-hours but a decade later it decreased by 700 points, meanwhile, natural gas added around 600 billion in
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 of 10 years. Nuclear has not much increase between both reports,
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, renewables developed some hours around 300, but petroleum area remained at
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 position after 10 years. Meanwhile, wind
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 by more than 200 points in a gap of
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, but
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 and geothermal industry
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 with
same
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 kilo-watt hours in 2019. solar
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 gradually with counted digits.
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same
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 condition.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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