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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table presents
the
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apply
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information about metro systems in New York
city
Capitalize word
City
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, London, Tokyo, Paris, Mexico
city
Capitalize word
City
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 and
beijing
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Beijing
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. It is clear from
data
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the data
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 in the table that
number
Change the article
a number
the number
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 of lines,
total
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and total
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 length. annual journeys and
cost
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the cost
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 of
single
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a single
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ticket
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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differ
depend
Change the form of the verb
depending
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 on
location
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the location
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 of the underground system.
According to
 what is shown,
New
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the New
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 York
city
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City
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 subway has the highest number of lines with 659 miles as
total
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a total
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 length and 2.5
cost
Change to a plural noun
costs
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 of money for a single
ticket
. Beijing comes second with 19 lines
have
Wrong verb form
having
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total
Add an article
a total
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 length of 357 miles, but the difference is significant between the
ticket
cost
 in China
an
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and
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 the United States of America. We can see Mexico
city
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City
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 metro and
beijing
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Beijing
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 subway have the lowest
price
Fix the agreement mistake
prices
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 for a single
ticket
with
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at
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 0.23 and 0.45 US dollars respectively.
In contrast
,
London
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the London
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 tube is the most expensive
journy
Correct your spelling
journey
 to take, it
cost
Wrong verb form
costs
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 7.30 US dollars.
To conclude
, we could say that Adian subways are the busiest underground systems among the rest.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, cost, ticket with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ridership
  • stations
  • advanced technology
  • underground network
  • busiest metro systems
  • route length
  • extensive system
  • passenger volume
  • modern systems
  • historical development
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