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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table compares six various
cities
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cities'
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metro
 systems.
Overall
, London was the first one
who
Correct pronoun usage
that
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introduced
Wrong verb form
introduce
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metro
Correct article usage
the metro
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 and the highest
Correct quantifier usage
number of kilometers
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kilometers
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kilometres
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 of
route
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the route
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of
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apply
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metro
 systems. Tokyo has transmitted the most passengers since it
introduced
Add a missing verb
was introduced
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 in 1927. London
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
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introduced
metro
Correct article usage
the metro
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 in 1963, and developed 394
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of route, since
then
 it has
transfered
Correct your spelling
transferred
transformed
 775
millions
Fix the agreement mistake
million
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of
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apply
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passengers. Other 4 cities
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
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introduced
metro
 systems in
20th
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the 20th
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 century,
in
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apply
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1900,1927,1976 and 1981, 4 different cities
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
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introduced
metro
, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC and Kyoto, respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words metro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ridership
  • stations
  • advanced technology
  • underground network
  • busiest metro systems
  • route length
  • extensive system
  • passenger volume
  • modern systems
  • historical development
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