You have recently moved to a new apartment. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter: explain why you have moved describe your new apartment invite him/her to pay a visit
Dear Myu friend,
I hope you and your family are bed, and
good
condition and healthy. I am writing Change preposition
in good
this
letter to inform you that currently
I move to Add a comma
currently,
other
Correct quantifier usage
another
appartment
Correct your spelling
apartment
due to
I feel booring
in the apartment before.
Correct your spelling
boring
To begin
with, I have stay
in the Change the verb form
stayed
apartmen
namely building Correct your spelling
apartment
senggigi
. But I have some Change the capitalization
Senggigi
froblems
over there like Correct your spelling
problems
Correct article usage
the thebethroom
thebethroom
isCorrect your spelling
the bathroom
Add an article
a
the
also
the the
water inside is not clear. The next reason is Remove the redundancy
apply
i
stay in the place alone. So I want to move to anotherChange the capitalization
I
Correct your spelling
apartment
appartment
.
In Correct your spelling
addition
addtion
I will tell you Add a comma
addtion,
abaut
my new Correct your spelling
about
appartment
. The name is building Correct your spelling
apartment
santong
, the room Change the capitalization
Santong
there
is absolutely good, Change the word
it
also
the servis
are very nice and Correct your spelling
services
service
quickly
Change the word
quick
then
the water is full with the clean.
If you want to stay with me over there, I want to invite you for
leave there. and we can play anything we want and we can Change preposition
to
dinner
together in my new Add a missing verb
have dinner
appartment
.
Thank you for your attention and your Correct your spelling
apartment
avdinve
, I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Correct your spelling
audience
Your
Sincerely
SaparwadiCorrect the word
Yours
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task achievement
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar. For example, 'I have moved to another apartment' instead of 'I move to another apartment.'
coherence cohesion
Try to make transitions between ideas smoother. Right now, some parts feel abrupt.
task achievement
Your writing tone is friendly and inviting, which suits the purpose of the letter.
task achievement
You provided clear reasons for your move and described the new apartment well.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite