The pie chart shows how dance classes are positioned in Australian town while the bar chart compares various kinds of dance classes which are being attended by young people.
Overall
, it can be seen that private studios
are dominant in having dance
classes
. Whereas
ballet has become dominant among children under 11, modern
way of dancing has more Correct article usage
the modern
members
whose ages are between 11 and 16 years old.
It is clear from the pie chart that almost half of dance
classes
are located in Private studios
and private studios
have the preponderance which accounts for almost half(48%) of all dance
classes
. School halls contribute for
nearly one-fourth(24 Change preposition
to
percent
) of Change the spelling
per cent
portion
of Add an article
a portion
the portion
dance
classes
. Community halls have 18 percent
of all Change the spelling
per cent
dance
classes
while
less contribution is made by college-based studios
with 10 percent
.
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per cent
According to
the bar chart below, most of ballet
class Add an article
the ballet
members
are children under 11 with 600 members
but when it comes to older members
, the numbers are
dwindled to about 300. To compare, the majority of young people (over 500) are choosing modern Unnecessary verb
apply
dance
classes
while
the number of members
under 11 is 300. There is a more balanced number of attendants in tap dance
classes
with approximately 450 for each category.Submitted by [email protected] on
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