You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

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Dear Manager, I hope you are great
healthy
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. I am writing
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letter to inform you that I have seen your brochure about
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to mounthains, I think that can make me
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interested
to join
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, but my feel is not fit.
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I'm
intrestid
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interested
in your
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brochure
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to
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. As we know,
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to
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the mountain
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mountain
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or hills are hobby of many people
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me,
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because
many things that we can learn when we triv, like we can see the natural environment and
this
body
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healtyh
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healthy
health
.
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please tell me about
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to arrive, like the dates, and the prices. Perhaps you can explain when the date to
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available
and how much the prices. As I said before, I worried that I
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fraid
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afraid
for not can join
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because
my body is not fit. Thank you for your attention,
I m
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I'm
looking forward to you soon. SAPARWADI.
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coherence cohesion
Work on improving the accuracy of sentence structure and grammar to make your writing clearer.
greeting and closing
Make sure that your introduction and closing are more clearly defined.
task achievement
You have addressed all the required points in your letter.
suitable writing tone
Your tone is polite and suitable for the context.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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