The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph provides information about the
amount
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number
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of living people in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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, and
Indonesia
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from 1970 to 2020 followed by the forecast
in
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2030 and 2040. It can be seen that from 1970 to 2020, the society's percentage fluctuated in
Phillipines
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Philippines
and
Thailand
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,
while
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Malaysia
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and
Indonesia
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were increasing
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moderately.
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, the projection
in
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2030 to 2040 increased gradually for all countries. From 1970 to 1990, the percentage of the population in
Phillipines
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the Phillipines
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has
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reached
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almost 50%, and had a downfall to 40% in 2020.
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, the number of living people in
Thailand
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was
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stabilized by 25% from 1990 to 2020.
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,
Malaysia
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and
Indonesia
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gained 70% of population in 2020.
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, the prophecy for the living society in 2030 and 2024 for four countries have
rised
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raised
risen
slowly by 25% to 35% in
Thailand
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, 45% to 50% in
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the Phillipines
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Phillipines
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Philippines
, 57% to 60% in
Indonesia
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, and 80% to 82% in
Malaysia
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, thailand, indonesia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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