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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predicitions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predicitions for 2030 and 2040.
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The graph provides information about the number of living people in the
Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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, and
Indonesia
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 from 1970 to 2020 followed by the forecast for 2030 and 2040. It can be seen that from 1970 to 2020, the society's percentage fluctuated in the
Philippines
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 and
Thailand
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,
while
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Malaysia
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 and
Indonesia
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 increased moderately.
Subsequently
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, the projection for 2030 to 2040 increased gradually for all countries. From 1970 to 1990, the percentage of the population in the
Philippines
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 reached almost 50%
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 and had a downfall to 40% in 2020.
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, the number of living people in
Thailand
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 stabilized by 25% from 1990 to 2020.
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,
Malaysia
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 and
Indonesia
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 gained 70% of population in 2020.
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, the prophecy for the living society in 2030 and 2024 for four countries has risen slowly by 25% to 35% in
Thailand
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, 45% to 50% in the
Philippines
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, 57% to 60% in
Indonesia
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, and 80% to 82% in
Malaysia
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words philippines, malaysia, thailand, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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