The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
The map shows the town of Canterbury where a school is going to be built at either two possible places.
The first location is located northwest of the city centre with an avenue joining the city centre and Sturry, populated by 7000 inhabitants with a distance of 5 kilometres;
while
on the northeast, a university can be found. Moreover
, the site is in the suburbs which means that people going there will possibly encounter traffic jams.
The second prospective site is located in the southern part of the central area which is surrounded by dwellings. To the southeast, there is a road that provides access to Chartham, which is inhabited by 4500 people, followed by a university located on the north.
In conclusion, the second place is a better choice because of its strategic location at the heart of the city, and the students do not have to experience the unnecessary long travel to reach the area.
the unnecessary long travel that the students have to experience to reach the area.Submitted by kelly on
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