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The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram illustrates the improvement of cutting tools in the
Stone
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 Age.
Overall
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, the given diagram witnessed significant changes
about
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in
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 tools' views
except
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except for
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 their heights in 6 million
years
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. Begin with
Tool
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 A,
this
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have
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has
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 3 views of
stone
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 which were used
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for cutting
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cutting
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for cutting
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 purposes
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apply
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in
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apply
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1.4 million
years
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 ago. The
tool
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 was 5 cm
height
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in height
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 and
have
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had
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copped
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a copped
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shape
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. In terms of
Tool
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 B,
this
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have
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apply
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also
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 3 views about
stone
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 and
this
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 cutting
stone
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 noticeably dramatically changed and reached more architectural illustration. In
view
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 of
front
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the front
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,
Tool
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 A
getting
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got
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 bigger and
getting
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got
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 a diamond
shape
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 over the given 6 million
years
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.
Tool
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 B, in
side
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the side
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view
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,
getting
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gets
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 thicker and sharper in the given time period. In terms of
back
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the back
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view
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,
Tool
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 A
were
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apply
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resembled of triangle
shape
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 and changed in
years
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 and
finally
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reach
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reached
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 and diamond
shape
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 like its front
view
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.
Tool
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A's
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A
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 and
Tool
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B's
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B
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 which
used
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are used
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 for cutting aims, have
same
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the same
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 heights in the given time periods, at 5 cm for both.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words stone, years, tool, shape, view with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stone Age
  • tools
  • cutting
  • development
  • rudimentary
  • sophisticated
  • progression
  • unworked pebbles
  • flake tools
  • bifacial tools
  • efficiency
  • materials
  • emergence
  • characteristics
  • functionality
  • craftsmanship
  • precision
  • hunting
  • carving
  • advancements
  • significance
  • human development
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