The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The picture indicates the production
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scratch. There are 7 steps to Correct article usage
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process
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sugar
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cane
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we have to grow the Linking Words
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cane
until it reaches the harvest age of 12-18 months. Afterwards, the Use synonyms
sugar
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cane
is harvested by using either a harvest machine or conventional tools. The harvesting method by using machinery costs significant money yet saves time and energy, Use synonyms
while
the conventional method requires more time and energy yet it is cheaper.
The trunk of Linking Words
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then
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further
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canes are crushed by the crushing machine and turned into Use synonyms
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cane
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juice
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The next step is
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juice
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is put into a large container called an evaporator where it boils until the Use synonyms
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crystal from the syrup by using an equipment called a centrifuge. After the separation Use synonyms
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we can continue to the Linking Words
last
step which is drying and cooling. The Linking Words
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