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The diagram below shows the proposed changes to an office building. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the proposed changes to an office building. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
digram
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diagram
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 illustrates the typical change for
office
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 building from Japanese matter to
Ameriacan
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American
office
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 matter. It
can
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is
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 clear that the place has changed significantly. To illustrate, four
facility
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has
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have
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 been added in
second
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the second
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digram
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diagram
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.
Furthermore
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, some sections have been arranged. Looking
in
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at
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 the maps
to
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for
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 more
detailes
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detail
,we can
seen
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see
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 that in
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the Japanease
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Japanease
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Japanese
office
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, there are only three
scection
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sections
section
. two
departments
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department
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maneger
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manager
managers
 have been arranged in front of
other
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each other
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.
In contrast
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, the department
mannger
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manager
in
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is in
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 the middle. with one window.
On the other hand
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, in the American
office
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, many
facillity
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facilities
has
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have
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 been added
such
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 as
,
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apply
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printer
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a printer
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coper
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copier
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, conference room and
storge
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storage
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. In
addion
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addition
 to
thatm
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that
 the
office
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 tables have been
reranged
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arranged
rearranged
 in
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a diffrent
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diffrent
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different
 manner in the
middel
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middle
 of the
the
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apply
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building.
Moreover
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, the
manger
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manager
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 sections and department section
hav
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have
 been replaced in the walls
in
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on
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right
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the right
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 side of the
office
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words office with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • modernize
  • efficiency
  • utilize
  • facilities
  • proposed
  • key changes
  • existing
  • highlight
  • zones
  • implications
  • flow of movement
  • improved productivity
  • work environment
  • implementation
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