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The graph shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by different countries in tonnes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by different countries in tonnes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the total weight of imported
tea
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 and
coffee
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 in Canada, the US, the
UK
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 and
Germany
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, measured in
tonnes
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
UK
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 has the highest
amount
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 of imported
tea
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 and
Germany
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 is the highest importer of
coffee
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.
According to
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 the data, the total
amount
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 of imported
tea
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 in the
UK
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 is the highest during the period, at 80,000
tonnes
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.
In addition
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, people in
Germany
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 receive imported
tea
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 by around half of the
amount
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 that the people in the
UK
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received
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receive
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. Canadians and the Americans
import
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imported
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 the same
amount
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 of
tea
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 from other countries,
amounted
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which amounted
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 to a quarter
amount
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 of
tea
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 received by the British.
On the other hand
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,
Germany
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 received 50,000
tonnes
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 of imported
coffee
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,
while
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 Canada and the US
purchase
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purchased
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 imported
coffee
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 at the same
amount
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, just one-fifth fewer than the Germans.
Furthermore
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, the
amount
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 of imported
coffee
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 in the
UK
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 is the lowest among the other three countries by 30,000
tonnes
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. Interestingly, there is a similar proportion of imported
tea
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 and
coffee
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 in Canada and the US throughout the period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, uk, germany, tonnes, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 7 times.
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