What are some challenges faced when moving to a new country?

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Well, when you go to another country you might have
different
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expirince
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experience
experiences
and there are some of
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the chalenges
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chalenges
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challenges
you will
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.
Firstly
, you will see the new
cultture
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culture
so you have to
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to
this
new culture by
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the
people
there about
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habit
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and how you will be
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by
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these
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community .
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Secondly
,
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most
people
when they change
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home they did't accept the
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food so you have to try to test the food of
this
country and if you don't prefer it you can order some
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recipes
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or
may
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you find some store or
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restaurant
that sell the food from your own
contry
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country
.
Therefore
, some
people
have an issue
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the wither and may get sick
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climent
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climate
change. In my opinion, there
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different
challenging
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the
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people
can
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deppinding
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depending
on
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purpos
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purpose
of the
traviling
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travelling
if you moving for
short
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a short
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time you don't need to adoption otherways if you go for a long time like
studing
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studying
you have to
addopt
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adopt
adapt
to the new culture and resiliante with new hapites.
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Work on organizing your ideas better. Consider using clear paragraphs for each point to improve the logical structure of the essay.
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Ensure that you thoroughly edit your work to correct spelling errors (e.g., 'expirince' should be 'experience', 'chalenges' should be 'challenges').
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Including more relevant specific examples can help make your points stronger and more convincing.
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You have addressed multiple challenges that people face when moving to a new country, showing a clear understanding of the topic.
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The essay attempts to offer solutions and advice, which is a good strategy to enhance the completeness of your response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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