The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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illustrates
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comparation
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comparison
in
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cosmetic
surgery
between women and men in
Korean
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Korea
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in 2004. The data are measured in numbers.The data are measured in numbers.
overall
, the number of
male
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doing cosmetic
sergery
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surgery
is relatively
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compared to
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females
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.
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transplantation
is the most popular
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between both
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. on the one hand, the highest number of
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surgery
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has been done for eyelid
surgery
lat just more than 300 ,
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makes it higher than rhinoplasty by around 20.
while
the lowest number is
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liposuction
surery
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surgery
at about 110.
In addition
,laser skin
resurafcing
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resurfacing
and breast enlangerment had approximetely210 and 2050 respectively.
on the other hand
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transplantation
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top in
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cosmetic
surgery
list at exactly 60 .
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the minority of Korean boys
preffer
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prefer
surgery
type and abdominoplasty . Meanwhile , rhinoplasty
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exactly 40 and, lesser skin resurfacing had
raghly
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roughly
60.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words surgery with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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