The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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illustrates
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a comparation
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comparison
in
cosmetic Change preposition
of
surgery
between women and men in Korean
in 2004. The data are measured in numbers.The data are measured in numbers.
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Korea
overall
, the number of male
doing cosmetic Fix the agreement mistake
males
sergery
is relatively Correct your spelling
surgery
lows
compared to Fix the agreement mistake
low
female
. Fix the agreement mistake
females
In addition
, hair transpilanation
is the most popular Correct your spelling
transplantation
surgery
between both gender
.
on the one hand, the highest number of Change to a plural noun
genders
woman
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women
surgery
has been done for eyelid Fix the agreement mistake
surgeries
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lat just more than 300 , wich
makes it higher than rhinoplasty by around 20. Correct your spelling
which
while
the lowest number is liposictiom
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liposuction
surery
at about 110. Correct your spelling
surgery
In addition
,laser skin resurafcing
and breast enlangerment had approximetely210 and 2050 respectively.
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resurfacing
on the other hand
,hair transpilanation
is Correct your spelling
transplantation
the
top in Change preposition
at the
men
cosmetic Change noun form
men's
surgery
list at exactly 60 . while
,
the minority of Korean boys Remove the comma
apply
preffer
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prefer
surgery
type and abdominoplasty . Meanwhile , rhinoplasty reach
exactly 40 and, lesser skin resurfacing had Wrong verb form
reached
raghly
60.Correct your spelling
roughly
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