In some countries, the government pays unemployed people on a weekly basis. How this would impact people as well as government? Do you agree or disagree with that?

Basic
income
is a social institute which was insinuated in some advanced countries. Its gist is payments for unemployed
people
from
a
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government. Some
people
believe that it is
an
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useful idea and in the
future
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the whole world will be used
this
one,
while
others adhere to the contrary opinion. I support
this
idea and will explain why in
this
essay.
Fistly
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First
, we will consider the positive arguments.
Post-industrial
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The post-industrial
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economy is very automated
hence
numbers of workplaces are reduced, especially unqualified labour becomes more useless. Most unemployed
people
don't have a source of
incomes
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income
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therefore
if they cannot find a job, they will
need
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take loans or commit robberies. In order to provide a comfortable life for every person, we
need
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help them.
Secondly
, we will consider
downsides
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of
this
decision. Basic
income
is an incentive to give up a job for some
people
inasmuch as their reinforces are more expensive than
difference
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the difference
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between the salary and basic
income
thus
a
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joblessness will strike
a
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society.
Moreover
, it is a burden on the country's
burget
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budget
whereas
this
money we can spend,
for example
, on
development
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the development
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of business.
Also
, it causes inequality in
the
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society
further
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the strife between working and non-working
people
. Conventional
laborer
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laborers
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will be disappointed at
this
injustice.
Additionally
, one non-obvious problem is migrants from poor countries
which
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who
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will come to get basic
income
and not work. In conclusion, I am a proponent of basic
income
because it is the most intelligible method to make
an
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imminent joblessness more acceptable.
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task achievement
Clarify arguments with more specific examples and reasons. For instance, provide an example of a country where basic income has been successful or cite statistics about unemployment rates in automated economies.
coherence cohesion
Correct minor language mistakes to improve readability, such as 'burget' to 'budget' and 'reinforces' to 'expenses'.
task achievement
The essay presents both pros and cons of basic income effectively, providing a balanced discussion.
coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are clearly present and related to the central argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment benefits
  • financial support
  • basic standard of living
  • essential needs
  • economic stability
  • job seeking
  • government expenditure
  • reallocation of funds
  • dependency culture
  • consumer spending
  • income inequality
  • safety net
  • public resources
  • workforce productivity
  • substantial resources
  • social equity
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