Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environment problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

While
it is widely claimed that an extinction of a particular
species
of
palnts
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plants
and
wildlifes
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wildlife
is considered a major threat
of
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today's environmental issue, others argue that there are more vital
issue
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issues
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such
as
climate
changes
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that need to be tackled
with
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immediately. Both
point
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of
views
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and reasons why I agree with the latter statement will be elaborated on in
this
essay.
To begin
with, it may
seems
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sensible for some to
believed
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that the loss of
an
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particular
species
will negatively impact on food web just like
a the
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unbalance
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scale.
This
is
possibly
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because these animals or plants
that
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act as
a
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prey and
predator
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predators
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which
know
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to be the key factors in balancing the environments. Without some
species
, the number of
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could
outnumbered
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its
preys
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which
leading
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to another risk of
an
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extinction of
species
. Take,
ants
and trees.
For example
; the tree
gain
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its
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protection from
ants
againts
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against
the plant eater animals and the
ants
received
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nectar and its nest in return. Without the
ants
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the tree could have been gone
due to
herbivores.
On the other hand
, many
opponent
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of
this
idea might
opposed
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that there
is
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are
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important environmental problems
that
is
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threatening
for
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humankind like
the
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climate
change
needed
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to be focused
instead
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on instead
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. To simply explain,
this
issue
pose
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a severe and lethal effect
toward
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not only all
species
on
Earth
but
also
the
Earth
itself. In
this
respect, there is
an
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evident
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showing that the
the
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ozone layer depletion causing the
Earth
to be
warmera
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warmer
and melting the ice in the
pole
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making the sea level higher. In my view, I personally argue in favour of
climate
change as it
affect
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the environment as a whole and wide range.
For instance
, The rise of
a
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sea temperature affected
on
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the
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nature in
numerous
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a numerous
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way
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such
as
a
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an
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abnormal natural event like El
nino
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and
la
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nina.
That the
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warmer water stream in the sea could affect the weather on
Earth
. In conclusion,
although
it is undeniable that the extinction of a
species
could create a serious threat to the environment in terms of
unbalanced
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the unbalanced
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food web, I am of the opinion that
climate
change
is needed
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to be
emphasis
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now in order to prevent
Earth
from numerous detrimental effects.
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grammar
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support
Expand on your arguments with more specific details and examples to better illustrate your points.
structure
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which make your essay easy to follow.
task completion
The essay addresses both views on the topic and provides your own opinion, fulfilling the task requirements.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • ecological balance
  • pollinators
  • keystone species
  • extinction
  • ecosystem services
  • pollination
  • water purification
  • climate regulation
  • climate change
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • environmental degradation
  • illegal wildlife trade
  • conservation
  • sustainability
  • preservation
  • habitat destruction
  • endangered species
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