The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The table provides information on the amount of portable mobiles sold by five major technology companies from 2006 to 2012, with each number representing a million sold.
Ericsson
and
Motorola
showed a clear downward trend, even when the former started with an optimistic one.
While
Ericsson
started with 74 in 2006 and increased to 102 in 2007, the rest of its
sales
gradually dropped, from 95 in 2008 to 28 in 2012.
Motorola
started with 210 in 2006 without any notable change outside of a sharp fall. By 2012,
Motorola
and
Ericsson
were tied for the least amount of
sales
with 28 million.
On the other hand
, Samsung and
Apple
rose with every opportunity. Despite
Apple
's lack of
sales
in 2006 and its rough start with 2.3 in 2007,
Apple
skyrocketed to 135.8 in 2012. Samsung was not facing the same problems, it had 117 in 2006 and consistently rose to 396.5 in 2012.
Lastly
,
Nokia
had the strongest start with 345 in 2006. It had a generally fluctuated trend,
Nokia
reached its highest point of 475 in 2008 before it fell to 442 in 2009. It increased again to 463 in 2010, and the graph ended with a dive for
Nokia
to 335 in 2012. In summary, throughout the
six year
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six-year
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period,
sales
from
Ericsson
and
Motorola
fell dramatically
while
ones from
Apple
and Samsung rose exponentially.
Nokia
was the odd one out with how its
sales
fluctuated yet generally dropped.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words ericsson, motorola, sales, apple, nokia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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