Smokers have rights too, so they should be allowed to smoke in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It
is argues
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that cigarette smokers
has
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justice to smoking in public spots
such
as in gardens, parks,
restsurants
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restaurants
, and
hospital
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. I totally disagree with
this
idea because it increases the harmful effects of passive
somking
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smoking
and
also
make
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environment
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the environment
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smelly. The primary reason is that, if smoking
become
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legalized smokers were relentlessly
smoking
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because those things are easy to
addicted
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, and in
cigerette
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cigarette
ingredient has Nicotine which is
can
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an
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created
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certain toxic and when
people
inhale that smog, it could
be
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harm to
people
's lungs
whereas
lead
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leading
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to lung
cnacer
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cancer
.
Therefore
, if smoking is allowed in open places
people
might be suffering
under
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the
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respiratory diseases
such
as asthma, and lung cancer.
Moreover
, passive smoking can have devastating effects on pregnant women, if they breathe in that
smoke
it could
be
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lead
embryonic
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malformation which is called harelips.
Hence
, if
smoker's
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happiness and rights
is
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are
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build
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on top of the
others
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miserableness, it does not make sense to get a
right
. The second main reason is that
,
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causing
people
to live in smelly environments is not a moral
things
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because cigarette
smokes
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smoke
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is really stinky if it
have
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has
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permissions
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permission
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to
smoking
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everywhere,
non-smoker
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non-smokers
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were
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no place to go.
This
approach can cause social
confliction
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between
smoker
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smokers
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and
non-smoker
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non-smokers
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. Because the
people
who do not
smoke
will discriminated against the
people
who
smoke
.
For example
, in
public
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a public
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area a smoker is
regardlessly
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using
smoke
and besite of
it
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whether it
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there
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apply
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is sitting an
infants
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infant
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or
teenagers
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teenager
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,
than
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then
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that baby can
be inhaled
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inhale
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smog and young
people
will imitate those bad
bahaviours
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behaviours
. In conclusion, even though
people
have
right
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to get
right
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rights
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but I remainly believe that
which
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that
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those
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things
is
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can cause
negative
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a negative
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imapact
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impact
impacts
more than
positive
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a positive
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impact which
mean
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means
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that,
it
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they
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have no
justices
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justice
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to get a
right
.
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grammar
Work on improving the clarity and grammar of your sentences. For example, 'It is argues that cigarette smokers has justice to smoking' should be 'It is argued that cigarette smokers have the right to smoke.'
coherence
Try to enhance the logical flow and cohesion of your paragraphs. Use linking words like 'furthermore,' 'moreover,' 'therefore,' and 'however' to connect your ideas more seamlessly.
examples
Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. This makes your essay more persuasive and relevant.
task response
Your essay addresses both the health risks of passive smoking and the effect of smoke on the environment, which shows a good level of task comprehension.
balanced argument
You have presented arguments on both sides (smokers' rights vs. health implications), which adds depth to your essay.
conclusion
Your conclusion clearly reflects your stance and summarizes the main points you've discussed.
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