Smokers have rights too, so they should be allowed to smoke in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It
is argues
that cigarette smokers Change the verb form
is argued
has
justice to smoking in public spots Change the verb form
have
such
as in gardens, parks, restsurants
, and Correct your spelling
restaurants
hospital
. I totally disagree with Fix the agreement mistake
hospitals
this
idea because it increases the harmful effects of passive somking
and Correct your spelling
smoking
also
make
Change the verb form
makes
environment
smelly.
The primary reason is that, if smoking Correct article usage
the environment
become
legalized smokers were relentlessly Wrong verb form
became
smoking
because those things are easy to Replace the word
smoke
addicted
, and in Change the verb
addict
cigerette
ingredient has Nicotine which is Correct your spelling
cigarette
can
Correct your spelling
an
created
certain toxic and when Change the verb form
be created
create
people
inhale that smog, it could be
harm to Unnecessary verb
apply
people
's lungs whereas
lead
to lung Wrong verb form
leading
cnacer
. Correct your spelling
cancer
Therefore
, if smoking is allowed in open places people
might be suffering under
Change preposition
from
the
respiratory diseases Correct article usage
apply
such
as asthma, and lung cancer. Moreover
, passive smoking can have devastating effects on pregnant women, if they breathe in that smoke
it could be
lead Unnecessary verb
apply
embryonic
malformation which is called harelips. Change preposition
to embryonic
Hence
, if smoker's
happiness and rights Correct article usage
a smoker's
is
Change the verb form
are
build
on top of the Wrong verb form
built
others
miserableness, it does not make sense to get a Change noun form
other's
others'
right
.
The second main reason is that,
causing Remove the comma
apply
people
to live in smelly environments is not a moral things
because cigarette Correct the article-noun agreement
thing
smokes
is really stinky if it Fix the agreement mistake
smoke
have
Change the verb form
has
permissions
to Fix the agreement mistake
permission
smoking
everywhere, Replace the word
smoke
non-smoker
Fix the agreement mistake
non-smokers
were
no place to go. Verb problem
have
This
approach can cause social confliction
between Replace the word
conflict
smoker
and Fix the agreement mistake
smokers
non-smoker
. Because the Fix the agreement mistake
non-smokers
people
who do not smoke
will discriminated against the people
who smoke
. For example
, in public
area a smoker is Add an article
a public
regardlessly
using Change the word
regardless
smoke
and besite of it
Correct word choice
whether it
there
is sitting an Correct pronoun usage
apply
infants
or Fix the agreement mistake
infant
teenagers
, Fix the agreement mistake
teenager
than
that baby can Replace the word
then
be inhaled
smog and young Wrong verb form
inhale
people
will imitate those bad bahaviours
.
In conclusion, even though Correct your spelling
behaviours
people
have right
to get Correct article usage
the right
right
but I remainly believe that Fix the agreement mistake
rights
which
Correct pronoun usage
what
that
things Correct pronoun usage
those
is
can cause Change the verb form
are
negative
Correct article usage
a negative
imapact
more than Correct your spelling
impact
impacts
positive
impact which Correct article usage
a positive
mean
that, Change the verb form
means
it
have no Correct pronoun usage
they
justices
to get a Fix the agreement mistake
justice
right
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grammar
Work on improving the clarity and grammar of your sentences. For example, 'It is argues that cigarette smokers has justice to smoking' should be 'It is argued that cigarette smokers have the right to smoke.'
coherence
Try to enhance the logical flow and cohesion of your paragraphs. Use linking words like 'furthermore,' 'moreover,' 'therefore,' and 'however' to connect your ideas more seamlessly.
examples
Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. This makes your essay more persuasive and relevant.
task response
Your essay addresses both the health risks of passive smoking and the effect of smoke on the environment, which shows a good level of task comprehension.
balanced argument
You have presented arguments on both sides (smokers' rights vs. health implications), which adds depth to your essay.
conclusion
Your conclusion clearly reflects your stance and summarizes the main points you've discussed.
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