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The chart below shows the results of a survey that sampled a cross section of travelers at a major metropolitan airport about the purpose of their trip. The survey was carried out during four different months in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey that sampled a cross section of travelers at a major metropolitan airport about the purpose of their trip. The survey was carried out during four different months in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The present table compares the percentage of data about the reason that people travel at a massive metropolitan airport in 4 different months( March,
June
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, September, and
December
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) of 2002.
Overall
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, the main aim which people had a trip for it was business except for months that had spare time the
holiday
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 was the best goal;
however
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, other objects had less peroration.
According to
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 the chart, travelling for Business in March and
June
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 are really popular because had 73 and 53 per cent, but in other months had the second level;
furthermore
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, in
December
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, the number of Business was nearly the same as
holiday
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.
Secondly
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,
Holiday
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 had a large percentage in
June
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 and
December
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 54 and 35 per cent. The table shows the journey for the Visiting family was the third one, and had the same trend as the
holiday
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, for in
December
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 and
June
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 respectively we can see 26 and 13 per cent.
Nevertheless
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, other reasons had less proportion, yet
at the end
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 of the year, the number of others increased.
In addition
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, the percentage in September was absolutely the same as in
December
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words june, december, holiday with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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