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The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK from 2000 to 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK from 2000 to 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The scatterplot and pie chart
gives
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 information about the UK's migration status, including how long immigrants intend to stay and their reasons for migrating. Looking at the graph, we see that in the first two
years
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, the numbers stayed relatively stable across three different demographics, with about 50
thousand
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people
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 staying for 2 to 4
years
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 and 150
thousand
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people
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 who
stays
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 for up to 2
years
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 or 4 or more
years
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. As we move on to 2002, the former
rised
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raised
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rose
 substantially until 2004, stabilizing at 250
thousand
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.
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, the latter has very little change. From 2006 to 2008, the number of
people
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 who stayed for 2 to 4
years
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 gradually increased and capped out at 100
thousand
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. Moving on to the pie chart, we see that more
over
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than
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 half of the immigrants moved for work or to
persue
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pursue
 education, totalling up to 68%. Another 16% moved to be with their loved ones , and
people
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 who had other reasons or did not give a statement each take up another 7%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, thousand, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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