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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided table gives information about the ratio of student attendance in four particular
schools
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 including (Grammar
Schools
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, Specialist
Schools
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, Voluntary-controlled
Schools
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 and
Community
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Schools
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, over a period of three years 2000,2005 and 2009.
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, it can be seen that the first year had the highest rate of attendance for all
schools
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 except
Community
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 School.
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,
Community
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 institutions experienced an upward trend,
while
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 the majority of them witnessed gradual and sharp declines.
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 with, the number of pupils who attended Specialist and Grammar institutions had a gradual drop in 2005 and 2009 which reached 10% and 12% respectively.
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, Voluntary- Controlled institutions had a significant decline in 2005 and 2009 respectively at 20 per cent.
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, the
amount
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 of people who attended
Community
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 school rose significantly from 12% in
2000to
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2000 to
 32 per cent in 2005 and 58 per cent in 2009.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, community with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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